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Write a letter to your English-Speaking friend. In your letter - Explain why you changed jobs - Describe your new job - Tell him/her your other new

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Dear Sara, Hope you doing well. It’s been quite
long
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 since we
last
 dined together. Just writing to let you know that I
finally
 ended up have a job at JP Morgan as an investment advisor and
its’s
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 like a dream come true. I was very desperately looking to make a move, as my existing task was quite boring due to repetitive
task
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 in my profile.
However
, I had my major in investment, I was only working as an accountant and
therefore
 was not able to demonstrate my knowledge. I am very passionate about investments and
hence
, I am very excited to pursue my career there. It will be a challenging assignment with many responsibilities and accountabilities.
Lastly
, I would be doing some analysis and will have decision-making power unlike posting entries into the system in my prior office. On top of that, I recently purchased a new house, and to my surprise, it is a walking distance
to
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 my new office. I would like to invite you to dinner at my place
next
 weekend. Looking forward to seeing you. Regards, Muhammad Munheem Kasbati
Submitted by Muhammad Munheem Kasbati on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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