In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Shopping is one of those essential needs normally in daily life. These days, for the most part people are keen on shopping as a hobby, but before people went shopping when they actually need. From my point of view, some

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with, shopping is a decision of many people after working hard is too tired and stress, which help us decrease these stressing things of a job during a long

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, we can go shopping with friends, family and even alone in where as centre shopping, a mall or a market. We even only buy or not choose to purchase after trying on these clothes

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you want to reduce work pressure, you can do really by a shopping activity.

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as. In conclusion, shopping has several positive impacts, and I completely agree with the idea that nowadays, shopping is concerned as a hobby.

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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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