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Scientific research can be the most effective when done by private companies. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
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 day and age, it is commonly believed that businesses being the private units can conduct scientific
research
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 in the most effective way. In my perspective, I totally disagree with
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 viewpoint due to many reasons. On the one hand, it is undeniable that letting private firms carry out
research
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 relating to science may have certain benefits.
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, in general, because the profit always may be the
first
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 concern of the companies, they can avoid wasting resources when conducting these kinds of
research
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.
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, when a company undertakes a
research
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 relating to demographics, they will calculate precisely and estimate the cost of the problems arising during the
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 process
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 as the fuel cost in order to commute to
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 destinations or human resource with a view to alleviating the company’s resources significantly.
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, thanks to these businesses which have done scientific
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, the governments may relieve financial burdens.
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, the nation leaders can allocate the state budget for other important purposes
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 as investing in infrastructures or enhancing the national military.
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, I believe that
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 is not the most effective measure because there is another one being better.
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 of all, due to the
concentration
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concentrated
 too much on profit, these companies can sell the
research
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findings they
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findings, they
 have found for other domestic units or even foreign nations for commercial goals.
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,
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 may seriously affect the national source of assets owing to the vital role of these
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research
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researches
 in supporting and boosting the economy.
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 of all, rather than letting private companies conduct the scientific
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, the authorities can take over
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 responsibility better. To be more specific, because of the huge amount of capital resulted from the public budget, the national governments will totally make use of various kinds of resources
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 as human and technology, which may lead to the more exact
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research’s
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research
 results. In conclusion, scientific
research
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 taken over by private companies may have a number of beneficial effects, but I am of the opinion that it is not the best option.
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