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TODAY, FOOD TRAVELS THOUSANDS OF MILES FROM THE FARM TO THE CONSUMER. WHY IS THIS? IS IT A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE TREND?

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In the
last
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 decade, the evolution of
technology
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 has influenced the life of human beings entirely. Potentially, recently,
food
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 transit from one place to another by crossing many national frontiers. In my opinion, it has many merits. The reasons and my inclinations regarding my opinion are elucidated in the upcoming texts. There is a range of reason by which the
food
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 transcends the barrier of the nations, and the foremost one is the
food
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 preservation
technology
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. By using it, human can store their delicious
food
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 without any taste alteration. Nitrogen gas,
for instance
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, it uses in
food
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 packets and many packed
food
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 exporters use it to sustain the sealed
food
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.
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, the cheaper,
convenience
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convenient
, and frequent air transition amenities make them more amenable than ever.
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, in the
last
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 trade survey reveals that, by air, about sixty percent of
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 freight is transported across the globe. And, I have a notion that it has numerable merits despite demerits, and the major one is
availability
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the availability
 of
food
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 whole year in every nook and corner of the globe. In simple word, people can enjoy their desired
food
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 taste in abroad with slashed
price
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prices
, easily, and without
hamper
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hampering
 its original taste.
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, with the advent of
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, varied seasonal
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such
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 as fruits and vegetables can be stored for a longer period. To exemplify, frozen samosas, parathas
and
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And
 diverse Indian cuisines are exported to US and many other nations. Agglomerating above all the points, it
can be say
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can be said
can say
 that, advance storage
technology
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 and transportation facilities,
food
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 crosses the national barriers,
although
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 it may have some negative points, enormous amount of benefits are unavoidable.
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