We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that we should
support
people in other
countries while
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countries, while
in our own society has a range of certain issues. I disagree with
this
opinion because I believe that we should focus on problems in our communities and societies. The possibilities to
support
everyone
around the world are seemingly impossible because everybody has their own issues, in order to help
everyone
that you need to resolve their own problems respectively, perhaps ten issues, hundred issues or even a thousand different issues.
Furthermore
, the distinction between culture, language, distance,
behavioral
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
society, especially personal ability and so on, in which that might cause you the significant challenges even it seems slightly unrealistic.
For example
, an American doctor, he is unlikely to be able to treat a person who got Covid-19 in Viet Nam by their own ability
instead
of another Vietnamese person by sending them to the local specialized hospital. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
also
believe that it would be far more realistic when we are likely to help people in our communities and particularly in our possibility. It is mostly because, we might understand clear-cut problems of those people who we are going to
support
, what they need to help, and how can we help them significantly and productively. In
this
way, we may not facing the barriers about language, culture and
that is
also
necessary
to
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for
everyone
in our country.
With
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the same concrete
example has
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example, has
mentioned above, I am
surely
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sure
that Vietnamese patients who will get much better by
treatment process
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a treatment process
the treatment process
of Vietnamese doctors rather than an American expert or any other foreigner doctor. In conclusion, we are willing to
support
everyone
around the world,
However
it would be far more both necessary and practical when we help people in our neighbours and citizens.
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  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
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  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
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