The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think the best way to deal with the problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the greater obesity rate of the population has placed in a stress on an attempt to tackle obesity-related ailments. Some individuals hold a belief that physical education programmes in schools are the most effective method to address
this
issue. In my opinion, I believe that there are many other efficient way can be taken into consideration to enhance people's health. I understand why many people consider physical activities in the school curriculum can deal with the pattern.
Firstly
, it is true that regularly doing exercise help an individual keep fit and stay healthy. When people engage in physical activity, calories are burnt,
thus
they can avoid being overweight, which causes severe diseases
such
as diabetes, heart attack. Not to mention that activity improves immune system, strengthen muscle and
then
boost the endurance.
For example
, athletes who
do sport everyday have
Suggestion
does sport everyday have
do sport everyday have
a good health condition compared to those without doing exercise.
Secondly
, given the fact that children now a day is so addicted to electric device and video games rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
outdoor activities that may make them weak and easy to being sick.
Therefore
, physical lessons give them the opportunity to enhance health and combat diseases.
However
, I think that some other measures can be taken to eliminate the problem. Since people are tending to eat more fast foods like pizza, burger, fried chicken that includes a large amount of fat and calories that cause the increase of cholesterol in blood, they are becoming heavier and hardly avoid ailments. So we can raise people awareness about the negative impacts of fast food, convince them to take a diet. To illustrate, many scientists have demonstrated that eating vegetable and fruits
instead
of rich calorie dishes can reduce help people healthier and stronger. Another way is getting involved more outside sports like running, swimming, hiking.
This
actives not only help burn energy, but
also
bring many benefits to humans. In conclusion, it seems to me that
although
physical education lessons can contribute to the prevention of diseases associating with obesity, other methods as mentioned above can be adopted to tackle the problem.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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