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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people are of the opinion that cars are the most convenient means of transport to travel, whilst others think that
bicycle
Suggestion
the bicycle
 has a distinct advantage over cars. In my opinion, bicycles are environmentally friendly and it has potential benefits in terms of health. In recent years using cars has been common and majority people prefer to drive cars whenever they plan to take a trip over a far distance. The main reason for
this
, I think, owing a
car
 provides comfort than any other type of vehicle. Obviously, other types of transport,
such
 as bus or train is rather time consuming and passengers are not guaranteed to have a convenient atmosphere during the journey.
In addition
, while
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by your personal
car
the work of providing treatment for or attending to someone or something
care
 it is possible to boost the spirits of family members by listening
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 music or even having some fun activities with them. Especially for disabled and elderly people, obtaining a
car
 is another plus point
that is
 very helpful. Despite the relative merits of having a
car
, the increasing amount of carbon
emissions which
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emissions, which
 are becoming a trigger point of air pollution is one the big disadvantages of
this
 form of transport.
Therefore
, in many
countries governments
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countries, governments
 are enforcing people to drive a bicycle that may come in handy for both pedestrians and authorities with the virtue of maintaining a healthy lifestyle and growing results in fresh air.
Moreover
, the rocketing results in heavy traffics are another minus point of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by
car
. But for the cycling, there is no need to worry about getting stuck in traffic jams. To conclude,
although
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by
car
 is the great number of peoples’ preference, I think cycling should be encouraged, so as to decrease the index of sedentary lifestyle among citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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