Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the human health of every country is in danger, each nation should make some regulation to improve their society. Some

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believe

that, increasing

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facilities will help to improve public health. Others say that

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would contribute only a small part, so they think, more

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are required. In my opinion,

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their life.

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sports

activities

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more merits to the

people

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life

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longer in the world.

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utilities should be available for all

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people

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it, which makes stronger our future generation.

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course, Here, kids play with their family and spend some quality time,

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they utilize

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space to upgrade their fitness.

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should create some more laws to update

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respiration problems.

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against water pollution like

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merging

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into rivers.

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a girl died

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people

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, I

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various fields rather than

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to make our region better.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

281 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
sports facilities
physical activity
exercise
chronic diseases
heart disease
obesity
inclusivity
participation
safe environment
social interaction
community engagement
comprehensive approach
health education programs
environmental factors
healthcare infrastructure
quality healthcare services
public health initiatives

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