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Some people think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the present world, education plays an important role in the future development of the country. For the
last
 few years, It is a matter of debate whether infants should schooling at an early age or get the admission at the age of seven years.
Although
 there are merits to both the view points. I would side with the former view point. On the one hand, those who consider early school life can be negatively impacted on teenagers in the form of stress and tension of work load.
For instance
, In many Asian countries
such
 as India and China, 90 percentage of teenage has found severe mental stress due to the education in the schools.
This
 is the main reason why parents are concern of their child and opt out for adding any extra burden by sending them to educational institutes too soon.
As a result
, children can enjoy their life which makes them happier and help them to grow in future.
Conversely
, despite the aforementioned argument, I believe that in
this
 fast paced developing world, education should introduce to a child at an early stage which help to create a solid building block.
For instance
, there are many students who are very young, and have been achieved certificates from Microsoft for being a genius in the academy and these numbers are kept increasing in western countries.
Moreover
, students can learn various skills
such
 as communication, social and intellectual skills from their counterpart which will help them a lot in the future.
Thus
, government should encourage parents to admit their child as early as possible for the well being of the society. In conclusion, while there are arguments in the favour of advocates who insist children should start schooling after the age of seven, I believe that early childhood teaching plays a vital role in the career growth of the teenager.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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