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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious problems and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems

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In cities, population has been growing by leap. There is no limit to it. It is causing a plethora of cons to the society. In the following essay, I intend to discuss about the issues of overcrowd in cities and provide some resolutions for it.
To begin
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 with, Cities are the major economic source for every country. People travel from rural to urban areas in order to acquire the jobs.
As a result
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, the cities will be over populated with humans and it causes lots of issues like increasing traffic and pollution.
Firstly
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, Majority of students and job professionals tend to stay in cities because it increases the opportunities for employment and studies. As people accustom to city culture, they will prefer to stay forever in the cities. To alleviate these issues, the government should encourage their citizens to use public transportation for office usage.
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furthermore
in addition
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, they should diminish the price of transportation which will increase the possibility of travelling using public vehicles rather than their own vehicles. The authorities should
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 allocate land to companies for less price in rural areas so that rural people able to get the jobs.
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, it will eradicate some of the problem in cities.
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, Individuals should opt for car pooling
instead
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 of using their own cars. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, There are many reasons why humans travel to cities like better lives and
good
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 growth. Everyone ought to take the responsibilities to eradicate the cities' problems.
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