Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their (13 to 19 year-old) teenage children.

With the changing time, a paradigm shift has been observed that the way of people living changed. In the
past most
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past, most
of the
decision
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was taken by the parents and
old
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older
people for young
ones but
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ones, but
in today’s era, mostly youngster
take
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takes
their
decision
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by themselves like the most pivotal
decision
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of choosing their
career
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If young ones choose their
career
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by own it creates interest among them and provide the satisfaction in future.
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, there are greater chances to become successful in their
life
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because they have
interest
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an interest
in the work.
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, a recent survey conducted by an organization illustrates the result that the numbers of people success in its
life
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who choose their
career
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in younger
life
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it mean in the age of 17-18 year.
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Secondly it
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Secondly, it
develop
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develops
the sense of ownership and responsibility among the youngster, which help them to decide about their education and training and about
job
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what they want to do in later
life
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.
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, today’s generation are more intelligent than older, they know what is better or not for them.
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, they choose the best quality of education and university, which help them to get
the good
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the best
job
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in later
life
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easily and identify their position as well as income which they want to achieve.
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, it is pivotal for
youngster
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youngsters
a youngster
the youngster
to choose what they want to be in
future
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the future
because
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
effect on their
life
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as well as on their family condition. If they choose a goal, which they want to achieve
thus
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focus on that rather than moving
aimless
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aimlessly
from
job
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to
job
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. To recapitulate, I personally believe that the young age is the best age to choose their
career
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and set their goals for
future
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the future
because in later
life
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due to family and work pressure people does not have time to make
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decision
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decisions
a decision
the decision
about their goal or
career
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.

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