The charts below show the main methods of transportation for people of one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the key modes of conveyance for

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university

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staff and students in the years 2004 and 2009.

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, it can be seen that most

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preferred to travel by car in 2004

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, a majority of

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liked to commute by bus in 2009.

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with, around half of the commuters used their cars to travel in 2004, followed by one-

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who went by bus. Only 9% of the

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used their bicycles, and the remaining 7% either walked to the

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(4%) or travelled by train (3%). In the

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five years,

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. Buses became the first choice of the

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the construction of a new bus stop at the

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in 2006. Around 55%

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travelled by car

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car parking in 2008. Interestingly, 40% more

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rode their bicycles.

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in 2009.

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The charts below show the main methods of transportation for people of one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

Museums and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than show the cultures or artworks of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some experts believe that is the better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Many people depend on their smartphones and other electronic devices for communication, work, and entertainment. To what extent do you think that this reliance on technology is affecting interpersonal relationships and face-to-face communication?

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?