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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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Due to the dramatic development of the technology,
internet
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 is a major platform to media there information has reached everywhere in the world within a shorter period of time. No doubt there is a plethora of adverse effects created by the website users. That has been affected the society drastically. Which was not existed before, because lack of knowledge about website use among the society. There are various complicated problems associated with the
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 as lack of individual privacy due to misuse of social media. The Childrens cross their barriers due to lack of security system in the world wide web. They easily can access adult sites
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 they will end up as antisocial behavioural children. None other than that, have institutions and banks
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 have limited security system due to open usage of
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. Hackers can enter into their system and they have access to trace the customer’s personal details. Government has to implement various legislation for social media users. Misusing social media and spreading fake news should be a punishable offence. Children have to be strictly observed by their parents and teachers. Awareness programme has to be conducted in the schools among children about dangers due to misuse of
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. My conclusion is using
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 in a correct way will minimize the problem among the society.
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 education should be introduced into the school to violate the students to protect them from a fall into danger.In my opinion, if a one wants to write the news in social media their information should be collected to identify the person
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 Strict rules and regulation should be implemented for hackers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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