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2. Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Recently there has been a drastic increase in the online learning process around the world. Many individuals believe that the benefits of online learning clearly outweigh the negatives. While others have the opinion that online classes cannot be compared to traditional one.
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 essay discusses both the above views and reckon traditional classes are always on a higher edge than any other form of learning. In the recent past, the world suffered a great loss due to the Pandemic of Covid 19. During
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 time schools and colleges remained closed. Teaching and learning took a lead on the online platform.
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, statistics show that 100% Student involvement was not there in the e classrooms.
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, parents believed that their child encounter stress while learning for hours on screen. When confirmed by students, 78% want to attend physical classrooms and believed them to be more comfortable in terms of interaction with the teacher. Online classrooms has its own benefits. Students almost had a 6 months e - classes.
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, statistics from Google, reveals that the survey conducted in Google classrooms shows that 90% students find it easy to understand a concept virtually especially when it was physics, biology or geometry. The design of the e classrooms is user friendly as everything can be uploaded from the teacher's end and available to every student even after the class is over. No doubt a greater mass is satisfied in terms of material, assignments and classes conducted online.
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 cannot be compared to the comforts of a physical classroom setting. In conclusion, technological advancement in the teaching learning process has revamped the education system today,
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 Students need to socialise and learn teamwork which can only be catered in a traditional classroom structure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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