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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

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In recent times, there have been several changes within families' structure and the roles that family members play.
This
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 essay will discuss those changes, and the impacts these trends are having on families.
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, in many countries, many people are now choosing to live in a nuclear family structure, where only parents and children live together, and grandparents live separately. In the past,
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, it was quite common in many countries for three or even four generations of a family to all live under one roof. There has
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 been a shift in the roles that various family members play.
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, in the past, it was commonplace for men have to work to provide for their families and women to stay at home to cook, clean, and raise the children.
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, many women nowadays choose to work
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, while some fathers stay at home to help out with family and household duties. These changes can bring about both positive and negative effects. Nuclear family structures allow more freedom for parents who no longer want to live in their hometown to pursue their careers. Many people need to live in large cities these days to find work,
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 many older, retired people want to remain living in their hometown. Though, one disadvantage of the nuclear family is that grandparents may not be available to help raise and care for grandchildren. In terms of the changing roles, women have greatly benefited from the opportunity to pursue a career, and become the breadwinner of the family,
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 of being a housewife. One downside of
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 trend, though, might be that some people would argue that women are better at domestic duties than stay-at-home dads. In conclusion, I believe there are both positive and negative effects of these changes, though the impacts on each family will be different.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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