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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

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In
this
 era of modernization,
one
 can easily access
food
 from any part of the world.
Although
 some people argue that local
food
 is better in terms of economic viability and environmentally it is debatable.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages, why its best to eat
home land
the country where you were born
homeland
food
. Consuming the
food
 sourced from the same
place
 is not only
healthy but
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healthy, but
also
 benefiting local communities. Vegetables, Fruits and other necessary ingredients required for the
food
 making sourced from a nearby
place
 are not only fresh, but free from chemicals where there is no need for preserving these items. These items are not only cheap, but
also
 helps the local farmers, shopkeepers and many other workers relying on
this
.Research from Harvard mentioned an experiment done on a rural town in
USA
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the USA
 where people used ingredients made from the same
place
 found that
costs
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the costs
 of the overall
food
 making is down by 25% and is 30% healthier than outsourced
food
 which has preservatives and other chemicals. Shipped
food
 in
the longer
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the long
 run has detrimental effects on health and
environment
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the environment
. As these foods are to be transported from
one
place
 to another which involves many days
of
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in
 transit
,
Accept space
,
companies are bound to add chemicals
for
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to
 longevity and bear the costs involved in the refrigeration, fuel and taxes to deliver.
This
 makes the
food
 costlier, often unhealthy and damaging the climate.
For instance
, a study carried out
in
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on
by
 people who regularly had taken foods from far away are 25% more risk
to
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for
of
 fatal diseases than the
one
 who have taken
food
 from local sources. To conclude,
one
 can get any kind of
food
 he desires from any corner but must be aware of the consequences
also
.
This
 essay discussed why home grown
food
 is not only
healthy but
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healthy, but
also
 sustainable way for the mother earth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon footprint
  • Local economies
  • Sense of community
  • Preservatives
  • Long-haul transport
  • Biodiversity
  • Cultivation
  • Extensive packaging
  • Ecosystems
  • Agricultural production
  • Energy-efficient
  • Cultural diversity
  • Global cuisines
  • Dependence
  • Scale of production
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