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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dresscode. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Nowadays, in many
school
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
 there are strict rules related to what the students can wear
or
of or belonging to us
our
 uniforms are mandatory.
On the other hand
, in some schools students are allowed to wear whatever they want, of course, their style should not be provocative. In
this
 essay, I will explain the pros and cons of having to wear
an
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a
 uniform. Wearing the same clothes as every other student in your
school
 or university is
actualy
in actual fact
actually
 very fun and
,
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,
in
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at
 the
smae
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
 time, makes all children
equal
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equally
.
For example
, some of the
pupil
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pupils
 can not afford designer label clothes and they do not dress well. Here the uniform
are
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is
crushial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
crucially
, because in
this
 way the rich and the poor wear the same clothes and
noone
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no one
 will feel different and shy, because of their clothes.
School
 is
place
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placed
, where people go to study
,
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,
 not fashion shows, where every student
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be
fashion icon
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a fashion icon
fashion icons
.
On the other hand
, uniforms can be very uncomfortable sometimes and
also
 they
can not
can not
cannot
 fit perfect for everyone. In
this
cases
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case
, where uniforms are sewed in 3 or 4
standart
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standard
 sizes the
obeesed
used improperly or excessively especially drugs
abused
 students will not feel
comfy
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comfortable
 and they will get
bulied
an uncultured, aggressive, rude, noisy troublemaker
bullied
bailed
 for how they look.
Also
, sometimes the uniforms are not suitable for hot weather and the person wearing them can get sweaty. Having to wear a uniform
make you
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make, you
not wondering
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don't wonder
 for hours what to wear
as
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at
school
. To sum up, uniforms are
effective way
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an effective way
 to remove the barrier between rich and poor children or students and make them more equal at
school
. From my point of view, dress code is not strange and if the uniforms are made one by one to fit perfect everybody they are something every
school
 must aim for.
Submitted by Румен Тошев on

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