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some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Although
, it is argued by some people that commuting by cars is the convenient
way
 to transport in the
city
, there are some people who consider that the best
way
 to
travel
 is by
bicycle
.
However
, in my opinion, in
this
 fastest world, people should consider cars, the best
way
 of transportation in a
city
 as it is time saving when we compare to other modes of ways. On the one hand, with the advancement of the roads in the cities, nowadays, people reach at their destination very conveniently by using cars. What is more, in the recent report 'The Times' illustrates that 95 percent of people who prefer to commute by car in the cities of Asia is the best
way
 of transportation.
Besides
, in
this
 technological world, there are many car companies
such
 as, Tesla, Honda and Audi which make cars up to the beyond level and they build cars, eco-friendly
therefore
 people can use not only to the electricity but
also
 can save fossil fuel for future generation.
Consequently
,
this
 mode of
travel
 is not harmful to the environment.
On the other hand
, there are some people who prefer to
travel
 by
bicycle
 in the cities. Travelling by
bicycle
,
in addition
, is mostly considered by older adults and young generations for morning exercise. No one is using
this
 form of transport to
travel
 to work or long distance as a person needs more energy to reach their desired destination.
Although
, some people consider
bicycle
 is the best
way
 to
travel
 around in the
city
, most of the time they use cars because of unpredictable weather condition. In a result, some people consider
bicycle
 as a secondary mode of transport as they cannot use for long distance. In conclusion, while some people consider to
travel
 by
bicycle
 in the
city
, I would suggest to
travel
 by cars as it is more convenient
way
 to
travel
 and available in the situation.
Submitted by Jay Dudhat on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenient
  • inclement weather
  • heavy loads
  • environmentally friendly
  • promote physical health
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • cost-effective
  • fuel costs
  • parking fees
  • comfort
  • safety
  • poorly developed infrastructure
  • traffic jams
  • parking options
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