Some people think that children's free time must include educational activities. Otherwise they will waste their time. What is your opinion.

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In
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modern era
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schools have
hectic schedule
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a hectic schedule
due to which toddlers hardly get
time
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for relaxation
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Its become debatable issue that educational activities should be involved in the spare
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time of
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time, of
offspring owing to
this
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they will not able to waste their leisure
time
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.
However
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, I
am not favour
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don't favour
do not favour
in
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idea
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I will discuss the reasons of my
view points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
in the following paragraphs
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To begin
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with
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why it is not right for children
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First
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and foremost
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,
juvinilies
of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people
juveniles
already spend seven hours in the school. If the education
also
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added in their spare
time
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activities
then
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they are not able to relax their mind and they face stress problems as well as the burden of their studies will
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mushrooms
due to
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methods
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method
.
For instance
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, the survey was conducted in 2014 by UNICEF shown that 80% learners faced stress problems just because of one reason that they always gave preference to their study even in free
time
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. So
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it will not good for mental development of pupils.
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whenever children are free
then
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they prefer to go out and spend
time
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with their peer group. Inspire of education
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,
it
is
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is also proving
has also proven
is also proven
also proves
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prove beneficial for learners in many
ways
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ways, such
such
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as they meet each other and share their feelings as well as emotions, play together due to
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they can develop their skills regarding
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being one more than one
two
particular things
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as
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teamwork. To illustrate my view point
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by spending
time
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with their
agemates
an active and efficient cause; capable of producing a certain effect
agents
children
oftenly
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learn about team work because they play
these king
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these kings
of games like Kho- Kho
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Kbadi
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Football and so on. These are
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important for their
further
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life. To sum up
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although
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education have
this
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own
importance yet
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importance, yet
it is not good that the free period of children converted into educational activities as the enjoyment in life is
also
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essential for the better growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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