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CHILDREN SHOULD ALWAYS FOLLOW THEIR PARENTS’ ADVICE. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT

#children #parents’ #advice
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Parents
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have
 great impact on
thier
of them or themselves
their
children
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child's
life
,
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,
they care of them in
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
 step
.
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.
since
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Since
 they are
infant
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infantile
,
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,
till they
beocome
enter or assume a certain state or condition
become
became
becomes
 adult.
in
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In
 any level stage children affected by
thier
of them or themselves
their
 family member
behavour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
,
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,
mainly parents.
who
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Who
 try to
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give advice to
advise
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And
 avoid negative track.
firstly
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Firstly
,
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree that children must follow their
parent
 advice
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becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they have
more live
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more life
 experiences
,
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,
and face a lot of
actions
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action
 during
thier
of them or themselves
their
life
,
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,
that have
gave
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given
 them vision and experience for making
decsitions
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
decision
 and solve problem.
parent
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Parent
allmost
(of actions or states) slightly short of or not quite accomplished; all but
almost
 looking for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 children priority
,
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,
what is best for them
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and what is worst.
then
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Then
 they
advice
give advice to
advise
 them
,
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allthough
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
 some children misunderstand
thier
of them or themselves
their
parent
 immediately
,
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,
but they discover the result in final after they become mature.
to
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To
 make
decsition
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
 in real
life
 or face daily actions
.
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.
you
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You
 must simply pass through many actions and activities
,
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that demonstrate only for old and expert people
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that's
 why
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 actions
,
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they advise other
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for the reason that; on account of
because
 they need them to avoid
mistake
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mistakes
 or save
thier
of them or themselves
their
 self from difficulties and problems.
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In
 other hand some
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • crucial
  • life lessons
  • best interests
  • life experience
  • understanding
  • challenges
  • invaluable
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • relying solely
  • hinder
  • beliefs
  • desires
  • generational changes
  • rapid pace
  • social and technological changes
  • outdated
  • applicable
  • digital age
  • necessitating
  • balance
  • tradition
  • modernity
  • deeply ingrained
  • value
  • evolve
  • honoring
  • deviating
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