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All children should be required to study at school by the age of eighteen. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Children usually complete
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 at different ages while some people think that students should study till the
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 of eighteen at
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. I am unconvinced that students should spend
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 long time at
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. By the
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 of eighteen a child can learn a lot of useful things. But if an infant stays at
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age he
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age, he
 might not get the essential overview of the hurdles he has to face in future. A child should learn some technical or vocational courses which might help them to get part time jobs in the future
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, research shows that teenagers who had some experience after completing
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 at an early
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 were more likely to get part time jobs easily.
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 , some people think that
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 might benefit the children as schools help children to create bonds with other children around them
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 in turn could aid in their better relationships with society which somehow makes them a better citizen
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 children are taught necessary skill and manners at
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 which are vital for the child To sum up I disagree with the statement that children should study at
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 by the
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 of eighteen It is partly true that children who finish
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 late will perform better in future Because in my opinion, those who complete
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 at a younger
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 are more confident and can cope with the problems they might face in order to attain a successful life as they would be mature enough to tackle with the obstacles
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