The course director of your previous college has invited you to attend a party for new students, and he has also asked you to give a talk about studying overseas. You have an important examination on the same day so you cannot attend the party. Write a letter to the director to apologize and to explain why you cannot attend the event. Suggest another date when you could give your talk.

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Loyds, It was great to hear from you. Thank you so much for inviting me to a party for new students

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Saturday. I’d absolutely love to come and give a talk to the students about studying abroad, but

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I’ve already arranged to do something very important that day. I’d like to apologize

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College event. I suppose you remember my fear

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a car when I was a student. I realize it's high time to have a driver's license So I’ll take a driving test on Saturday. I have to pass my exam to get a part-time job in a big trading company. I really want to get together, though. How about meeting with the students

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week? I know you’ve got a lot on your plate,

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couple weeks of works at College and all.

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I’ll give you a call and we can sort out the details over the phone. I’m looking forward to attending College and hope to see you soon! Yours sincerely, Cho Ir

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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176 words

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