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Life nowadays is generally much more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer more from stress nowadays and say what they can do to reduce it.

#life #people #stress
Nowadays,
stress
 is a common problem among people,
life
 is becoming more stressful
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 before. In
this
 essay I will discuss why
life
 has become so difficult and how
this
 situation can change.
To begin
 with, the central reason of stressful
life
 is increased competition
in
Suggestion
from
 day to day
life
,
such
 as education, employment, and even in sports. Students and employees,
for example
, are pressurized by their parent and employer to perform better from the others. Students are expected to achieve a good number of their exam and employees are overloaded with the employer unrealistic expectation
.
Accept space
.
This
 makes them more anxious and stressful because they feel overwhelmed by the expectation of associate persons.
On the other hand
 people are spending more than they earning to maintain the social status. Especially on marriage, we spend a big amount to make an impression on others, later
this
 can be caused for financial problems. Through changing
this
 situation is difficult, but we can handle our
stress
 to follow a healthy lifestyle.
Firstly
, competition is good for one’s growth, it must not destroy one’s inner peace. People ought to encourage to compete, but the impracticable goal should not be imposed. People should maintain a healthy working
life
, so that they are able to spent time with their family.
Also
, medication and yoga can be a good option of removing
stress
. In conclusion, there is no denying that people are more
stress
 in present time
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 before. A right set of thoughts and policies,
such
 as restriction on unnecessary expenses, can help to improve the contemporary situations.
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