In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

Selecting a place to live in is a big decision to make. In some parts of the world, people value
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their own accommodation because it is a sense of achievement rather than renting which could not save money in the long run. From my perspective, house ownership is a natural human desire. First and foremost, many individuals seek to own their personal house where they
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live with peace of mind.
Although
they may struggle to acquire it,
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many people tend to purchase homes as per their
need
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.
For instance
, in many
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countries, people mortgage and take loans from the banks to purchase property.
Whereas
, living as a tenant, not only one must
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abide
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rules and regulations set by the landlords, but
also
individual can not renovate or repair
according to
his
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.
Thus
, it is imperative to have a
home
where one can live peacefully.
Nonetheless
, I believe that having a
home
has many positive aspects
such
as it gives freedom in doing many things. Persons will not
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bound to anyone's rules and regulations and owners have the opportunity to renovate frequently. Taking myself as an example, when I was living in the suburbs of Auburn, Sydney, I
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even move a refrigerator from
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to
other place
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, so having personal accommodation is necessary to thrive in
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society.
Furthermore
, the sense of satisfaction can be felt in our own building which could be missing in renting
apartment
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so,
this
will make the owner feel more relaxed.
Hence
, owning a
home
gives satisfaction.
To sum up
, a place to live
is
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truly depend on the dwellers
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they live as a tenant or
having
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his
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own flat.
However
, renting a
home
could not
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save finances
while
ownership can save money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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