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Leadership can be demonstrated in many ways. Please share how you have demonstrated leadership in either your school, job, community, and/or within your family responsibilities. Please limit your response to 250-300 words.

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For me, being a leader doesn't always mean standing at the front of the room or imposing your will on another, I'm not a typical leader per say like I wasn’t a captain of a sports team or I've never found a club or organization, but I've shown a lot of my leadership at home and outside school. I used to help my grandparents when they are sick, I used to cook food, do the chores without even asking and get them necessity items like medicines and all. I even worked at an orphanage for the
last
 2 summers of my high school and the
first
 2 summers I used to play cricket for Intramurals at school. Me and my cousin sister used to
work
 in an orphanage, well not mostly
work
 there, but we used to supply the orphanage every month with food supplies and other necessary commodities. We
also
 helped kids get the necessary health care and studies. We used to go one Sunday every month to see how the kids are and how they are with their studies. Kids used to get excited by our visit and we used to be equally excited visiting them, those Sundays were the best and happiest days were some of the happiest days of my life. I will continue serving as a leader in college. You only get one shot at college, and I want to have meaningful experiences helping the needy. I am excited to
work
 alongside like-minded, driven, service-oriented Longhorns. I
also
 look forward to joining service groups and
work
 in community services
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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