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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A Group of people
believe
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believes
 in
modern
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the modern world
a modern world
world
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, humans turn into far reliant on each other, some people,
however
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, believe human beings become more independent. In my opinion I completely agree with
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first group
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the first group
 since the complicity of today’s
life
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 has increased dramatically and
cost
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the cost
 of living in
modern
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a modern world
the modern world
world
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make
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makes
 people more dependent On the one hand, some people support the idea that new generation
become
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becomes
 far reliant on each other than past because the complicity of living in the fast changing
world
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 has increased dramatically and I completely agree. Technology has overshadowed everything in our
life
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. It develops interpersonal relationship between people.
For instance
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 In the
past most
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past, most
 of occupations were not very complicated
.
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.
But today most of the tasks keep
a breast
being up to particular standard or level especially in being up to date in knowledge
abreast
 with latest technology and they
requires
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require
 collection of skills to be done, therefor people are unable to do some jobs on their own and they have to rely on each other more to keep
a head
at or in the front
ahead
 in their job,
furthermore
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 Living in
modern
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a modern world
the modern world
world
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has
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had
 several times as many costs as living in the past has. And family members have to cooperate and support each other more to meet their
basics
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basic
 needs.
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hand some believe
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hand, some believe
 that nowadays people become more independent.
Indeed modern
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Indeed, modern
life
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 provides people with different opportunity in order to enjoy an eraser
life
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.
For
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instance computer
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instance, computer
 has received currency among people and gives us
this
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 chance to do
array
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an array
 of things without any help just by a click. We have an easy access to
mine
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a mine
 of information that pave our way to be highly individualistic.
Further
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 living in modern
world
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 lays the foundation In conclusion, despite people have
different v
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a modern world
the modern world
iews about modern
life
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, I believe living in modern
world
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 makes human beings more dependent on ea
ch other due
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the modern world
 to complicity of
life
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 in fast changing and modern
world
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 and high cost of living
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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