Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While there are some arguments about whether sports facilities could help in the improvement of public health or not, some people opine that

further

procedures should be taken to get better results. From my point of view, sports equipment in parks and public areas are essential, along with other measures to help people improve their lifestyle.

This

essay will debate both viewpoints, and present my personal perspective. On the one hand, sports facilities could play a vital role in shaping the body, and gym admission fees are not affordable for everyone.

In other words

, the government's duty is to provide these gadgets for free charge, and in each park or children's playground.

This

could motivate people to exercise and have a vulnerable time with their families as well.

This

can be exemplified by a report published by an Iraqi medical magazine, which has manifested, that the ratio of obesity and heart diseases has dropped down since the government's decision of providing sports equipments in national parks and playgrounds around the country.

On the other hand

, several measures should be considered to improve public health. To illustrate, the supply of proper medical care for needy people is crucial. Needless to say, fitness and exercise do not prevent virus infections, for healthy and strong people can have it.

Furthermore

, authorities should raise awareness about illnesses and unhealthy food in order to get better results.

For example

, funding television programs that educate individuals on various topics related to health and lifestyle is an effective way as well. Having presented the ideas above, I have drowned the conclusion that sports facilities and media roles are both vital. I want to reiterate my stance that sports devices should be affordable to everybody.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
sports facilities
physical activity
exercise
chronic diseases
heart disease
obesity
inclusivity
participation
safe environment
social interaction
community engagement
comprehensive approach
health education programs
environmental factors
healthcare infrastructure
quality healthcare services
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