Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

it is common to find
young
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generation in
cities
instead
of
countryside
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the countryside
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and there are only old
people
in the
countyside
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countryside
.
this
essay will examine the cause and solution of
this
phenomenom
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phenomenon
.
firstly
,
cities
have more opportunities than
countryside
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the countryside
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.
as
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cities
have grown with convenient facilities,
people
have
gethered
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gotten
to enjoy
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comport
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city-life
style
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lifestyle
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. and companies build their factories near
cities
or in
cities
to find human
resource
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resources
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easily. so young
people
leave
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the countrysde
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countrysde
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countryside
to go to
cities
to find jobs.
secondly
, only
few
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jobs in
countryside
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the countryside
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can support higher
salary
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salaries
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. young generation's consumption is getting higher and the salary from
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tradirional
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traditional
business field is limited. so it is natural to go to
cities
to earn more money.
to
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release
this
situation
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the gevernment
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gevernment
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government
should give benefits to the
company
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companies
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that settle down in
countryside
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the countryside
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. reducing tax and loaning with low
intrest
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interest
can be the way. if companies go to
countryside
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the countryside
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,
people
will
also
go to
countryside
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the countryside
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to follow the opportunity. to deal
this
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situation we need
long-term
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a long-term
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strategy.
as
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cities
were not build
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were not built
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in a day,
this
situation
need
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needs
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time to be
sloved
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solved
loved
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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