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These days it is very common to have people from two different generations mix in the same workplace Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this situation? Give your own opinion and include relevant examples.

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In these days and ages, it's a general matter, if there are two various races join in the same recruitment. In my view the benefit outweighs the detriments, along with both arguments my opinion will given
further
. There are many good points in
this
, the foremost one increasing numbers of global economies. Leads to a positive and beneficial If there are some international contributors to a specific field, due to outbreaks of outsider's product and advanced technology, the consumer prefers someone who attend them in an effective way
,
Accept space
,
providing a positive condition to the organisation or institution.
For instance
, in worldwide, several companies work with international parties, for a better income and provides all kinds of manufacturing in the entire world,
such
 as
mc'donald
, cosmetic (Nivea, perfumes, makeup) branded gadgets, equipment which is consumed in every nation.
Furthermore
,
this
 not only creates a better relationship when it comes to self development, but a great atmosphere among the people who work's in a particular venue.To add
this
, it avoids discrimination, racism, judges to a certain extent. On the other hands, While respecting others can improve performance of any individual when are suppose to go outside of their native-place and joining another group.
However
, some detriments can be ignored if comes cultures, traditions, food and lifestyle, in which group of individuals has to gather with each other. To conclude,
this
 has many positiveness compared to some few ignorance. I believe that everybody has to mix up with their team or colleagues weathers its a workplace or any kind of activity.
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