The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
It can be seen that there are two charts about how happy
people
are when they are married and single
as well as
the happiness ratings of the
children
of
people
who are married in the USA. The graph compares the levels of happiness of
people
at different ages. (represented by colours??I don't know if it would be necessary)
According to
the graph married are happier than unmarried
people
. It can be observed in the category married the
group
happiest are between
ages
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of 18 and 29 with 45
percent
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while
the 55 to 64 age
group
represents the unhappiest category.
In contrast
, the largest
group
of happy singles are over the age of 65 represented by 34
percent
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,
subsequently
,
people
between the ages of 30 and 49 make up the
second
happiest
group
by 22
percent
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. The
second
chart demonstrates an interesting rating the
children
´s couple have similar amounts of happiness. The happiest
children
are represented for the
group
under 18-year-old
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44
percent
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and other groups with a similar percentage, adults
by
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43
percent
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and
children
with
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18 years old
41
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percent
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.
Overall
is clear that married
people
are happiest arriving
almost
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double of percentage compare with singles
as a consequence
their
children
are happy as well
with
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the
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a
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similar rate.
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