Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is argued that public
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is increased by sports facilities.
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, now I will discuss about the sports facility increases public
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. Undoubtedly,
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increases public
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health but
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health, but
comparatively percentage is very less. Undoubtedly, good
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means sound
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further
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more sound mind. In my opinion, in spite of efforts, after some
time many
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time, many
looses interest in sports.
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interest does not lose long except for a few.
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,
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costs a lot to the
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.
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, In India
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has made lots of basic gym
equipments
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equipment
in the interest of the public in the public parks.
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is really a tremendous and
appriciatable
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act done by the
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. Undoubtedly, exercise, increases the good
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. In fact,
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is only the way of life. Rather,
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should increase the awareness and the benefits of
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to the public. Low cost but more benefits. To conclude, sports facility benefits a few people with lots of expenses. Unlikely, increasing the awareness of the exercises and the way today's
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has installed basic gym equipments in public parks, these 2 steps are more worth in my opinion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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