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Is it better to live together before marriage? What are your opinions in this?

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Nowadays, the young generation believes that living together before marriage is beneficial. But what is the most effective method of dealing with people's mindset regarding living together before marriage? Some people believe that
this
 problem will spoil our culture. I completely disagree with
this
 idea and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, staying together will help them to know each other better.
For example
, the couples might know about their likes, dislikes, habits etc.
In other words
, they can know each other better which will lead to have a happy wedding
thereafter
. According to the survey, love marriages
last
 long compared to arranging a marriage, which might conclude that knowing each other lead to happy wedding. Another reason why I agree with staying jointly is they can overcome one's bad habit cooperatively. To exemplify
this
 idea, if any have smoking or drinking problem,
then
 he/she can help one another to eradicate
this
. By doing these things, one can
also
 enhance their personality.
On the other hand
, there is an argument that they might do something worse that leads to damage their lives. For illustration, the couple might unable to control their hormones and their immaturity leads to sex.
As a result
, many societies find
this
 problem as spoiling our rich culture. In conclusion,
although
 many individuals find it worse, living together is better before wedding to know each other. Personally, I would believe that the lovebirds should me mature enough about their sincerity towards their relationship.
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