Young people now spend far too much time and money on following fashion trends (such as technology and clotting) to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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During early era, clothing was included in basic need of every human being to cover and protect themselves from for harsh weather the Mother Nature had to offer. But times have changed.

This

simple need I'd a man become

fashion

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a fashion

nowadays.

It's

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Its

influence on people from all

gender

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genders

and all ages, especially on

young

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the younger

generation. I totally agree with

this

statement that young people spent cost on trending clothes

regardlessly

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I will put my points to prove my statement. In my opinion, often we see actors and models in commercial advertisement, newspaper and magazines. They are in fashionable and high branded clothes so many people try to makeover like them. But is

become

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becoming

expensive for

ordinary person

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ordinary people

the ordinary person

because celebrities wear big branded clothes by professional designer and they do not repeat again. So it's affordable for those who belong from

film industry

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the film industry

. They promote that brand and they gain

money

through

this

but people like us we can't gain anything. Here, I would like to give

example

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an example

the example

of my friend. She is fashionable lady and she spent her 50% of salary to purchase same attire as Alia

bhatt

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Bhatt

have

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has

. Because the only reason is Alia Bart her favourite actress so she compare herself with Alia. It's better if she spent

money

on books or education rather than costly cosmetics and clothes.

Secondly

, fashion is changeable trend by its nature. Today's trending style will change tomorrow. So, obviously it is

waste

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a waste

money

. It is not only about

clothing even

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clothing, even

in technology. People buy valuable Mobiles and gadgets to show high status. But the day after

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another new technology will come and the old one will be done disappear. Pursuing fashion isn't actual

bad

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worst

thing. But spent broader amount of wage on every trending one it's bad. I believe to wear comfortable clothes

instead

of spending high value. I prefer that

money

to save for my future or investment.

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