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Some people believe that university education should be only offered to those who can pay for their own courses and the government should not be expected to fund higher education. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no doubt that people have differing opinions about university
education
. Some people subscribe to a view that higher
education
 should be virtually available to those who have
high
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higher
 eligibility to meet the cost of their studying expenses so that the
government
 is no longer in charge of funding
further
education
.
However
, several individuals are
totally against to
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totally against
this
 opinion. Whilst, there are many valid points
to justify
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justifying
such
 a viewpoint, I will not broadly agree with it. Admittedly, higher
education
 should be accessible for
everybody no
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everybody, no
 matter what financial status they own in
society
.
This
 is because the general population of
society
have
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has
 equal rights to study, to consume, to live. If a person comes from
poorer background
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a poorer background
poorer backgrounds
, it doesn't mean he should be discouraged as he is illiterate.
Instead
, he should be promoted by the
government
 supporting financially. If
this
 action works out, after graduating higher
education
, those who accepted financial support from
government
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the government
 will pay back a great deal.
Likewise
, it is highly likely to assert that destitute part of
society
have
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has
 invariably higher demand towards doctors, teachers, engineers who can contribute to the welfare of all. Without having access to study,
this
 layer of
society
 will continue to be even more illiterate or uneducated.
Therefore
, it seems fair if the
government
 support with financial supply, those who own lower social status begin to diminish and become literate citizens of
society
. By the way,
society
 will be civilized and flourished with knowledgeable citizens. To conclude, I will disagree with the opinion that everyone should pay for their expenses. I feel that it is the
government
 who is responsible for funding higher
education
.
Submitted by Aziza Azamatovna Akhmedova on

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