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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The world is fast
chaning
marked by continuous change or effective action
changing
, and ready meals help modern citizens not to be left behind.
Accordingly
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, there seem to be some benefits that individuals can have, which are eclipsed by the drawbacks of convenience foods.
To begin
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 with, people can enjoy a more relaxed and interesting life thanks to a variety of ready-made
food
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.
This
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 is because cooking
itself
the thing named or in question
it
 is quite time-consuming and labour intensive. Generally, several steps are required to make a dish, from buying
necessary ingredients
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the necessary ingredients
 to plating.
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, if workers and students purchase meal kits or frozen
food
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,
then
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 it only takes a couple of minutes to make themselves something to eat.
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, there are hundreds of different
food
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 products, so consumers are possible to try more various dishes, which is one of
pleasures people
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the pleasures people
 usually seek for. Despite the positive aspect of edible goods that are cooked in advance, we cannot forget about their negative features. The most evident one is its poor nutritious values. Since the
food
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 is heated and made before being packaged and sold, it is almost inevitable to add preservatives for them to stay fresh and tasty longer.
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,
such
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 menus are usually high in fats, salt and sugar
to captivate
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captivate
 the taste buds of the public at once. Needless to say, the added chemicals as well as an excessive intake of three nutrients do more harm than good to our health. In conclusion,
although
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 the consumption of ready-made
food
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 items appears to be advantageous in terms of surviving in
this
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 hectic world, we lose more than we gain from having
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 poor diet in the long term.
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