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Some people belive that museums should be free to everyone and not charge an entry fee. To what extent do you agree ?

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Museums offer us the opportunity to learn about a variety of subject areas in more depth,
such
 as
history
 or nature. While it is possible to go to some museums for free, the majority of the require a visitor's fee.
This
 essay will argue that all museums should be free to everyone. One reason is that
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the museum
are
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is
 an excellent source of education. They help us to understand our culture, and other people's culture, better
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 displaying objects from our past.
For example
, at the British Museum you can see objects from around the world which help us to understand world
history
. When museums charge people to enter, not everyone is able to pay and so
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to a considerable degree; very much
far
fewer
 people have the opportunity to learn about that
history
. Another reason is that when a museum charges, it only really affects people on lower incomes in society. Wealthier people
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 able to afford to visit and
as a result
 will become more educated.
However
, people on lower incomes will be less likely to afford a visit and will
therefore
 not benefit from the museum in the same way. The effect of
this
 is that not everyone has the same educational opportunities as others in our society. In conclusion, I would suggest that free entry to museums
allowsbeveryone
 to learn about
history
 and culture.
However
, for
this
 to be possible, the government will have to provide funding for the museums. Without money from visitors or government funds, museums will not be able to find, buy, take care of
or
of or belonging to us
our
 display historical objects.
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