Technology has changed the way people communicatr today. Some people belive this is making our relationship stronger while others believe it is harming them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Technology

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has altered the way we live right now. Many things have changed, including the way people communicate today. Before

technology

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has changed, to communicate with people we

should met

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should meet

them somewhere or texted them letter to

postoffice

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post office

. But

nowdays

the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech

nowadays

technology

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offer

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offers

us many practical

way

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ways

to reach people. There are many social media

app

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apps

to reach people. The problem is some people

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

this

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is stronger their

relationshop

a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)

relationship

and some believe it is harming them. In

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essay we will discuss both points of view.

Firstly

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technology

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through social media reach us easily and offer us many benefits.

For example

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, if we miss our friends or families we can just take our

phonevand

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call them. Even, we can see their face from

phone

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the phone

. Not just a phone call, we can easily text them.

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stronger our relationship because we can reach us easily

anytime

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any time

Secondly

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, we can more friends through

online platform

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an online platform

online platforms

the online platform

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will give us more connection. In the other hand,

technology

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hasn't just offer

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hasn't just offered

us practical ways. There

are

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also

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negative impact in order to communicate

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with

people.

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, we know

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from

online but

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online, but

we don't really know who they are. They can be

fraud

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a fraud

. There many

case

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cases

about misconduct and fraud now through social media. Another reason why it is harming is because we rarely meet people because we only see

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then

objective case of they

them

through

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This

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is really unfortunate because the connection that we have is just about online not real. Another case that I found, people expect more from their online friends and when it comes to

reality they

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reality, they

are just different and let people down. In conclusion, I suggest that we should open ourself to a

technology

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changes. But, don't let

technology

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fool us. We should be more careful and values life.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Technology has changed the way people communicatr today. Some people belive this is making our relationship stronger while others believe it is harming them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Your opinion

Many countries raise fuel prices to deal successfully with problems of traffic and polluon. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution ?

Some companies use a lot of packaging when selling their products. Why is this? Is it a good thing?