In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Past times have witnessed shopping -be it of a small paper clip or a large washing machine as a mandatory routine domestic task. But the people during

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last few decades

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the last few decades

have changed to a big lot of obsessed shopping freaks. People today regard not reading or

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drawing, but

shopping as a hobby- the

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which during some times was the part of

daily chores

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the daily chores

. In my

opinion

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opinion, this

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sudden change holds a little value and can hardly be regarded as a positive

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. It cannot be denied that shopping done as a task is much

beneficial

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more beneficial

than done as

hobby

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a hobby

. In

this

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changed scenario shopping at large reputed malls has become a status symbol making people to spend a lot more than they have

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to buy the things they

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actually need and to impress the people they

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even know. They hardly bother much about their monetary conditions

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People today

tend to buy not

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tend not to buy

because they need something but just because they are allured and tempted by the glory and glamour of the shopping stores and malls. Shifting towards another aspect I feel that

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trend

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is much common in youngsters and especially the females. Younger minds are easily swayed away by the advertisements of the beauty products, electronics, clothing and

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a lot

more which

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of course

halt their academic performances and hamper their minds to understand the importance of money. They force their parents to buy them expensive items they see and

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arises

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has arisen

yet another problem- the online shopping, which generally brings along

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a huge number

of frauds and scams making Children

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they're

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However there

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However, there

are people who believe that shopping as a hobby has much positive aspect as well

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as it helps

one

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to relax

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calm and enjoy. It boosts positivity and is a great fun with friends and family. But obviously if

one

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weighs the pros and cons of

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a situation

the situation

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personally

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take

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trend

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to be a productive

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. I from my personal experiences can strongly say that people with shopping as a hobby are really poor decision makers,

don’t

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value money and are often so obsessed that they act impulsive at times. In

nutshell

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a nutshell

, shopping as a leisure activity just takes away the time

one

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could use more productively performing variety of physical activities or talking to a dear

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so undoubtedly is not at all a positive

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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