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Some people prefer to buy local product while other prefer international product tho what extend do you agree or disagree

#people #product #tho
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Nowadays it has been
debatable
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a debatable statement
debatable stated
debatable stating
statement
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 from
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last two decades
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the last two decades
.
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.
some
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Some
 people
are preferring
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prefer
 to wear international products while other completely averse.
the
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The
 modern world has given their priority to important clothes and footwear's
.
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.
I am going to elaborate both side
statement
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 in
substantial paragraph
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a substantial paragraph
 before
given
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giving
 my perception. To inaugurate with the contemporary
world especially
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world, especially
youngsters are
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youngsters, are
 more conscious about their outlook
.
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.
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thus they
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Thus, they
Thus they
mostly preferring
Suggestion
are mostly preferred
are mostly preferring
mostly prefer
 branded clothes to enhance their style
statement
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.
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.
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for
Suggestion
For
instance if
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instance, if
 an individual attend the party until branded dress
,
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,
everyone pointed out that the person belongs to a financial weaker section.
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consequently it
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Consequently, it
Consequently it
 has been a status symbol among society
.
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.
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Secondly
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Secondly, although
although
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 a group of people
have
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has
 to spend a hefty amount on branded commodities yet it will valuable and long lasted
further
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.
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.
apart
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Apart
 from that
this
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 trend has been
increased
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increasing
 rapidly
.
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.
On the contrary
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,
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,
 who averse the use of global products
,
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,
their
in or at that place
there
 are multifarious reason
,
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,
 substantially the local products are cost effective rather than other nations
.
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.
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further
Suggestion
Further
 more if society will purchase domestic
meterial
the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
material
materials
,
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,
it would be certainly
upgradation
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 in
financial
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the financial statement
statement
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 of our nation.
despite
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Despite
 for more local production government has made multifarious
movement
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movement, such
such
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 as (go local
)
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)
 and so on
.
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.
beside
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Beside
 companies should more focus on quality and comfortability of the product
.
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.
 In the way of conclusion
,
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,
both statements have
Thier
of them or themselves
their
 own
peacularities
an odd or unusual characteristic
peculiarities
 pros and cons
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 it is necessary to make long lasted product for enhancing their
sale
Suggestion
sales
.
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.
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