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Write about the following topic: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, the technological revolution presents an enormous invention to humanity which is a
computer
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, there are many advantages
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 as remote working or learning, there is a downside
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, in
this
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 essay, we will elaborate on the importance of the
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.
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 of all, the innovation of
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 considers one of the most successful creations in our era, as there are numerous advantages result from it,
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 as the ability to study even if you are away overseas because the barriers have been smashed,
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, I had certified MBA master from Oxford Cambridge in London, while I live in my home country which is Egypt,
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, the rate of online education has been raised because the long-distance is no longer crucial, and
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, the world has become a small village as you can communicate, work, learn wherever the place is located as long as you have a
computer
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 plugged to the internet.
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, the benefits which result from
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 invention are countless, there is a downside
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, the more people use the
computer
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 the more isolation will increase in the society,
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, the
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 survey which runs by MSA university claimed that 60% of kids who are using a
computer
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 regularly have become more introvert than other kids who not using the
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 and in order to avoid
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 harmful we need to limit the use of computers,
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, for kids. To sum up, the debatable matter will
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 regarding the most important inventions in
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last years
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the last years
, the majority of people agreed on it would be the
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, as our life has been affected dramatically since the invention of it,
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, I convinced with the same point of view of people.
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