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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Children often misbehave and when they do so many parents smack them to teach them a 'lesson'. To inculcate disciplinary values in children necessary actions should be taken and physical punishment is the very
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 thought that comes in the minds of many parents, but I totally disagree and my reasons will be explained in
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 essay. There are many reasons why parents feel that smacking is the best form of discipline. To embark on, they are under an impression that children will understand the difference between good and bad behaviour if they are treated strictly and best mode is physical punishment. Whenever they do something wrong, smacking will restrict them of repeating it. Few of parents
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 absolute control of their children and often resort to
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 barbaric practice to show them, who is in charge of households. Unfortunately
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smacking does does not help with the behavioural issues in children.In fact, it makes their problems worse.Studies have shown that the children who grow up in
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 they are often subjected to smacking or any other form of physical violence are more likely to grow as rebellious teenagers.They start to detest their elders and may develop a hatred for authority.Is
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 the result, parents expect when they smack their children? Of course, not.Having said that, it is important to discipline children and parents can do that by spending quality time and setting examples in front of their children.If they get indulged in some wrong activity, counselling is the best way to make them understand by respecting their emotions. To conclude, children are our future and should be raised with at most care, love and patience. Good parenting and Smacking can not co - exist. Smacking traumatise children and may even lead to more adverse impacts on the growth of children.
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 entirely disagree with the statement that, smacking children are the best form of discipline.
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