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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A museum is an entity which preserves the artefacts of history or indirectly traditions and cultural information inside it. The importance of museums and art galleries is undoubtedly beyond a controversial issue.
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 are scopes to discuss whether they should charge the entrance fees or not. I partly believe that, the admission fees to visit
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 places have more disadvantages than benefits.
To begin
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 with, It is very important for our youth to go and visit
such
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 places, But due to the entry fees they will hesitate to call on
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 places and will go to the movies or parks
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. Despite of that, some financially tight people
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 wouldn't be able to visit.
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 with, most of the museums and art galleries are funded by government or some organisation, just like beaches or gardens. So it is unlikely for them, to collect ticket money, for the purpose of extra earning. Some proponents of museum entrance fees believe that, it is important for the maintenance of
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 old artefacts while they fail to realize that, keeping money can be easily covered by the funding of high tax payer's.
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, free entry to the museum would attract more international visitors and spread the cultural uniqueness to the world and
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 bring more tourists to a country. If there are charges, tourists would visit more popular places than the museums. To conclude, Free entrance to museums and galleries have numerous long term and many immediate benefits which can far outweigh the single monetary advantage ticket money system has.
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