Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself.

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Dear Auntie Jane, How have you been? I have exciting news! I will be in Sydney for two weeks over the university break.
Due to
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inflation, hotels are really expensive so I am wondering if I could stay at your house for the duration of my trip. It
will
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would
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be good if I could stay at yours as we have lots to catch up on. During my trip, I will be happy to pay for the whole holiday on my own.
Firstly
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, I can pay
you
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your
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rent personally to assist with the rising cost of living.
Secondly
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, as I will need to visit my friends on most days, I will mostly eat at restaurants so you do not need to purchase more food.
Lastly
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, I will be happy to contribute to
you
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water and electricity bills I hope to hear from you soon. See you in Sydney! Best wishes, Joscelin

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suitable writing tone
Ensure to maintain a polite and friendly tone throughout your letter, which is appropriate for personal correspondence. You did well on this.
complete response
Consider providing more details about what you plan to do during your stay, enhancing the completeness of the response.
logical structure
Try to use connectors and linking words to improve the logical flow between sentences and ideas.
greeting and closing
The letter opens and closes with a warm tone, which is perfect for writing to a relative.
suitable writing tone
You did a great job in expressing your willingness to contribute financially, which shows consideration and respect.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a distinct part of the task, making the letter easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • stay duration
  • schedule
  • house rules
  • financial contribution
  • expenses incurred
  • gratitude
  • eagerness
  • return visit
  • flexibility
  • accommodation
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