The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future then it is now. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is a widely held belief, that as pollution is surging it is becoming a threat to the environment, the air quality is degrading; water is no more waste-free and food products are no longer pesticides free.

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, the level of health care in

near future

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the near future

will be worse.

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, my view is contrary to the public opinion as in

upcoming days

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the upcoming days

we will be more scientifically advanced.

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, advances in technology had already changed the way we used to live in the days gone by/in the past. Nowadays, individuals are far more dependent on western medicine as compared to, past when home remedies were thought to be effective solutions.

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, numerous viruses and diseases have grown rapidly after the industrial revolution. But drastic measures have been taken by governments around the globe to enhance research methods.

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, they can deal with any type of non-communicable/chronic diseases.

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, in 1920 the Spanish flu took almost 50 million lives. Whereas if we consider the situation we are going through, only about 500 thousand people died from corona virus.

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, vaccine of corona virus is yet to

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find

but it has steadily improved due to advances in the field of medicine.

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, another issue is the rising level of CO2 emissions. Though, fitness levels have been decreased as a consequence of the litter generated.

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, it is adversely affecting health’s of innumerable people. While,

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a development

made by a number of countries is actually helping them to get a practical solution to waste management.

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, China has installed the world’s largest air purifier in Beijing to control air pollution. To conclude, there are relentless efforts being made by several nations to considerably improve the decreasing standard of health.

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, investment in expansion of scientific research is not a quick-fix

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solution, but

it can surely help us in the future to provide adequate health facilities and to raise the physical maintenance/fitness of the general public.

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Standard of health
2. Average
3. Lower
4. Future
5. Aging population
6. Chronic diseases
7. Sedentary lifestyle
8. Lack of exercise
9. Poor dietary habits
10. Environmental pollution
11. Technological advancements
12. Impact on health

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