with deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

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Animals Life matters. Many species face the fears of being extinct because of Deforestation and out of legal hunting

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, How to handle it? At my point of view, all of these actions must be ended. If I were the decision maker, I would produce laws and orders to protect the animal's lives. It's not about just putting some sentences that prevent these actions, but it should

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, We need to be positive and connect with the responsible when detecting unlikable actions that have a very bad effect on the animal extinction.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

116 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

deforestation
urban development
illegal hunting
endangered species
extinction
ecological balance
ecosystems
pollination
seed dispersal
population control
biodiversity
resilience
intrinsic value
economic benefits
tourism
agriculture
legislation
wildlife protection laws
illegal hunting
wildlife reserves
marine protected areas
public awareness
conservation
community involvement
sustainable practices
scientific research
conservation strategies

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with deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulosry part of high school programmes. To wat extent do you agree or disagree?

In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction, causing high levels of water and air pollution. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, women never feel need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn and therefore do not require financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree or disagree?