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Supermarkets should only sell food produce from within their country rather than from oversea. What is your opinion on this?

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One of the most important issues that many people in society concerned about nowadays is whether or not
supermarket
 should only sell domestic
food
. Some people believe that it should be done while others have negative attitudes. From my point of view, I am completely against the above statement because of some reasons as below.
To begin
 with, it is true that the quantity of products which are produced within
country
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a country
the country
countries
 is not adequate to the consumers ‘demands. The increase of
resident
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residential
 land for buildings and apartments which are caused by the overburden population contributes to the decline of farm lands for agriculture. It means that it is not enough area to crop and sufficient
food
 for all citizens. In my
country
, the
total of cropped
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total crop
total of crop
 area is more and more narrowed. And the sum of goods which are collected can be supplied approximately a half of
population
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the population
.
In addition
, some vegetables or fruits cannot be planted within
country
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the country
a country
countries
.
For example
, a tropical area as my
country
 cannot grow blueberry which is
famous
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a famous food
food
 in temperate zone like USA.
However
, more and more people in my
country
 prefer enjoying blueberry rather than other fruits. Under these circumstances, the government has to enhance the import of some significant products from other countries.
Moreover
, that
supermarket
 does not sell any foreign overseas causes the long-term negative effect on the profit of
business
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the business
a business
. In fact, there are many ways in
order
 that people can enjoy or buy products which are made in other countries. A significant illustration is that they can
order
 goods on
Internet
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the Internet
 and ship them from outside through
airplane
 or their friends who travel
oversea
beyond or across the sea
overseas
 or live in other countries.
As a result
, it is
seemed
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seeming
 to lose a large number of potential customers for
supermarket
 over the time.
Hence
, businesses cannot gain enough income as well as profits in
order
 to maintain their
supermarket
 systems.
Last
 but not least, it is
obviously
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obvious
 to see that the internal enterprises cannot know the weaknesses of their products compared with foreign enterprises if supermarkets only sell domestic products. Imaginably, if only internal goods are sold, only domestic business will be
competitive
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competing
 together.
Therefore
, the quality of products is not improved and even their prices can change arbitrarily.
In contrast
, in foreign countries, they can make the same product with
higher
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high
highest
 quality and reasonable prices
with
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by
 using high technology which
attract
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attracts
 more customers. To sum up, there are good reasons why supermarkets should not only sell
food
 produced within their countries. In my opinion, both foreign and domestic products should be displayed in supermarkets in
order
 that all enterprises can compete together and consumers can use the diverse products.
Submitted by behzad on

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