Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Due to the fact that there has been a great development in technology, the smartphones might become
an
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a
unreplaced
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one-place
part of human’s
life
in the modern world. It
generally make
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generally makes
our
life
easier and
also
offer us a variety
ultilities
a company that performs a public service; subject to government regulation
utilities
in one single device.
Thus
, the cellphones
is
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are
now so important that the users consume most of their spare time at. I am of the opinion that there are two major reasons for
this
trend.
Firstly
, these tools
help
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helps
us stay contact with others
for instance
parents, siblings, colleagues, friends and acquaintances by phone calls, chat box and some social network application
such
as
facebook
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Facebook
, twitter and Instagram.
Secondly
, it is the fact that people now probably using their phones to organize their
life
and make it more convenient.
For example
, it is able for us to read news while having breakfast or book a flight for the holiday while we are at home. Despite of these
afore mentioned
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
aforementioned
reasons, research suggests that, due to the fact that we are hardly really able to disconnect, we might become more anxious and dependent on our devices. In some cases, these could lead to serious addictions and make our health harmful like short-sightedness and the
toxic
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toxicity
of radiation.
However
, mobile phones could provide us with knowledge and entertainment in our breaks.
It
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It's
also
useful in numerous ways and with lots of subjects.
For instance
, with workers, it
help
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helps
them to check work mails and
setup
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set up
a meeting. With students, they could study online, find sources of information and
lookup
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look-up
new words
on
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in
online dictionary
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the online dictionary
an online dictionary
online dictionaries
by using
cellphones
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cell phones
. It
also provide
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also provides
basically all other users with a great sources of entertainment
such
as
youtube
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YouTube
, movies and games. In
conclude
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concluding
,
inspite
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in spite
of some side effects of
this
development, in my view, it is overall a positive change and today, the smartphones are really useful in our
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • digital addiction
  • instant gratification
  • multifunctional
  • connectivity
  • social networking
  • online services
  • self-expression
  • entertainment options
  • instant access
  • educational resources
  • communication tools
  • virtual interactions
  • distracted living
  • technological dependence
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