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People should be allowed to continue to work as long as they want to, and not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65. Do you agree or disagree?

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People are being forced to retire when they reach their
retirement
age
 of their country.
This
age
 is between 60-65 in almost every country. I strongly disagree to
this
 Notion. In
this
 essay, I will talk about why
retirement
age
 is not necessary and why people should retire whenever they want.
To begin
, retiring at a specific
age
 without consent can cause some financial problems. Every
persons
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person's
 working life is different. Some earn plenty while others
work
 hard to buy food so they won’t suffer of famine.
Consequently
, financial
statues
the relative position or standing of things or especially persons in a society
status
 can change person to person. So they got to
work
 longer than others.
For
example according
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example, according
 to
BBC
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the BBC
, citizens of
shanty town
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a shanty town
shanty towns
 in Brazil, never quit working at their
retirement
age
, they
work
 until they got abundant money to spend their lives.
Secondly
, many people
work
 for making
sufficent
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
significant
 money and want to retire as soon as possible.
However some
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However, some
 people love their
work
 so much that they dedicate their
life
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lives
 to their job. For them, their payment is not crucial. Forcing those people to retire at a specific
age
 is keeping them away from what they enjoy
to do
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doing
.
For instance
, Al Pacino is a
succesful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
american
of or relating to the United States of America or its people or language or culture
American
 actor who is 80 years old and hasn’t retired at America’s
retirement
age
 (66 years, 2 months). In one of his interviews, he said that acting gives him joy to live. To conclude
,
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,
in my opinion there shouldn’t be a specific
age
 to retire. People should make their own decision
individualy
apart from others
individually
 with thinking their dreams and future.
Thus
, people won’t be forced to do something they don’t want to do.
Submitted by Alara İnan on

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