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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides.

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At the current time, it is very common that people looking after themselves. Some of them saying that physical activity is more effective in improving well-being, while the others keeping eye on the healthy diet. On the one hand, physical activities
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 have a place in the maintenance of a healthy lifestyle. Having regular exercises will keep the body in good shape and it will help to prevent some complications.
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, usually, people who are not physically active have overweight. Obesity can cause heart problem, increase blood pressure or can lead to mental disorders. For adults, it is advised to do at least moderate aerobic activity
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 as brisk walking, dancing, hiking or riding a bike. It is better to be active every day but any activity is better than none.
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, a healthy diet is a very important part of maintaining good health. Balanced and non-chemical, food will be beneficial for our well-being. According to the National Health Service (NHS), people should try to eat a wide variety of foods
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 as fruits and vegetables in the right proportions. The food and drinks which are high in fat, salt or sugar should be reduced or even excluded from main meals.
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, there is exist a lot of mobile applications which help to educate, organise and monitor your daily intake. It is useful for those who have problems with weight, blood pressure or blood sugar. In conclusion, many people think that exercises are better for their health, whereas others think that a balanced diet is more essential.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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