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At present, the media affects people’s lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? Is it a negative or positive development.

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Today’s world is highly dependent on the broadcast news, radio etc. Everything in the world is just surrounded by media. Very positively our news has made its special space in our society. Some have
this
 perspective that television has made our life easier by providing a
lot
 of the world’s information in just a few seconds whereas some has a negative perspective towards media. Admittedly, there are numerous positive reason through which our media will affect our society as it helps us to get a
lot
 of educational information on various subjects without being physically present in schools or institutions.
For example
, through the radio, television people can study even abroad or even at far places without even travelling to the destinations. Though news channel, a person will be able to get all the relevant news
that is
 happening in the world.
In addition
, a
lot
 of learning and interactive rhymes are available on television, which will
further
 help the parents to train their toddlers while sitting in the house. Though there are few negative impacts of media on our society like sometimes they exaggerate the situation a
lot which
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lot, which
further
 creates a panic and havoc in the mind of listeners.
For example
, nowadays India-China border problems, newspaper is making a scenario of war in the minds of the public by giving false information whereas the circumstances are not at all like
this
. Despite of all, there is a
lot
 of positive growth in the economy because of media as it
also
 provides facility to work from home through advertising or designing the templates.
For example
, according to a survey conducted in INDIA, 20 % of married women are working from home and supporting their family financially. To conclude, the media has outweighed its positive developments in all fields
in contrast
 to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 negative developments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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